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雅思写作开头10大误区 来看看你是否躺枪
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摘要：很多雅思考生都存在雅思写作问题，而开头的写作是最主要的错误之一，有的考生开头过分啰嗦，有的考生中式英语痕迹太浓，甚至还有一些考生如偏离轨道无轨电车一样侃侃而谈，不明所以，语法词汇错误一大堆，实在不忍直视。小站教育整理了十大错误的写作开头，希望能够对考生的复习有所帮助，大家在平时的复习备考中一定不能再犯这些错误。
“见官死”开头之一：过分啰嗦型（喷血指数：☆☆☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married?
This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……
修改方案：开门见山 直奔主题
In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.
Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? （）
Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.
Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection
Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!
“见官死”开头之二：中式英文人见人晕（喷血指数：☆☆☆☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life
In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”.
“见官死”开头之三：观点模糊态度暧昧 (喷血指数：☆☆☆)
典型失败案例：
Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
“见官死”开头之四：偏离主题无轨电车（喷血指数：☆☆☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? （雅思真题）
I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
“见官死”开头之五：语法错误惨不忍睹 (喷血指数：☆☆☆)
典型失败案例：
Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished?（雅思真题）
About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.
“见官死”开头之六：过分简单没有重点（喷血指数：☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic-The importance of environmental protection
This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!
“见官死”开头之七：用词不当 表达不准（喷血指数：☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.
“见官死”开头之八：意思重复原地踏步（喷血指数：☆☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic-Your opinion on DINK families
My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.
“见官死”开头之九：中国俗语胡乱翻译（喷血指数：☆☆☆☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family?
I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……
正确说法：Happiness lies in having many children
Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?
We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……
Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?
Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.
“见官死”开头之十： 观点武断态度强硬（喷血指数：☆☆☆）
典型失败案例：
Topic1-The importance of confidence
In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.
Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem
I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.
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从今天开始，Coco将会逐点传授7分小作文技巧。这次分享中，Coco将着重解析小作文中的图表题。Coco从历次考题中总结出轻松保7的方法，每天按着这种方法训练，淡淡定定过7绝对不是梦哈。
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今天我们先学习图表作文开头段第一句（P1S1）的正确写法。
雅思小作文图表题的题目背景句（background Sentence）总以类似形式出现：
“The graph below shows ...”
意思就是：“这幅图展现了...”(省略号位置是信息内容)
而我们的作文里第一段的第一句话（P1S1）必须将这个句子作为背景句（BGS）陈述给阅卷的考官看。但是，我们不能照抄题目！所以，我们必须对题目的BGS进行改写。这种改写有两种方式——“低级改写”和“高级改写”——后面会陆续说明。
低级改写指的是“词-词”改写，也就是说，我们要把原句中的词进行同意转换。对于那些基础不太牢固的亲们，在达到7的高度前，必须先学会如何安全保6，而正确的低级改写是个必要武器。而为了做到这点，掌握一定的相关词汇是必须的。下面请识记图表题P1S1中必须脱“手”而出的换写词汇：
1.图：graph/chart/diagram,线形图line
graph/chart，柱状图bar
graph/chart，饼状图pie
graph/chart,&表格table
展示：illustrate/present/show/unfold（Coco比较支持学生用unfold,一来地道，二来中国考生通常不懂这词用法，因此撞词率大大降低，同时够“装”）/
give information on/show data/ statistics
on&（在写“展示”这个动词时，考生要注意时态和单复数，最保险的做法是“跟题目原句”，它有s你就加s,&没有就不加。）
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4.&国家：state/
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7.&数量：amount/
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请看改写范例：
剑8Test4原句：The grahp
below shows thequantities of goods transported in the UK between
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低级改写：The line chart unfolds theamounts of
goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by four
differenttypes of transport.
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pie charts belowshow the changes in annual spending by a particular
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低级改写：The three pie graphsunfold the changes
in annual expenditure by a particular UK school in
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　　1、According to the first graph, it can be seen that ______________, it can also be concluded from it that ______________.
　　2、There is an interesting and instructive picture which goes like this: ______________.
　　3、Nowadays there is a growing concern over ______________. Many people like ______________,
　　while others are inclined to ______________.
　　4、Nowadays, it is common to ______________. Many people like ______________ because ______________. Besides, ______________.
　　5、 ______________, just like many other things, are preferred by ______________. While being attacked by the idea that ______________, some people consider ______________. They point that ______________.
　　6、Everything has two sides and ______________ is not an exception, it has both advantages and disadvantages.
　　7、For years ______________ had been viewed as ______________. But people are taking a fresh look at it now.
　　8、It has stipulated by the government that ______________. To this stipulation, many people respond actively because ______________.
　　9、______________ is a common occurrence in our daily life. Whatever we do, ______________ can't be avoided.
　　10、______________ has become a hot topic among people, especially among the young, and heated debates are right on their way.
　　11、Recently, ______________ has become the focus of the society, and in this way.. People swarm to ______________.
　　12、______________ has been playing an increasingly important role in our day-to-day life. It has brought us a lot of benefits but created some serious problems as well.
　　13、Man is now facing a big problem-______________, which is becoming more and more serious. First, ______________ second, ______________.
　　14、Nowadays more and more people are beginning to be aware of the seriousness of ______________.
　　15、It is only during the last years that man has become generally aware that ______________.
　　16、There is an old saying, ______________. It's the experience of our forefathers, however, it is correct in many cases ever today.
　　17、The English proverb says, ______________. This is quite true because ______________.
　　18、______________ is now______________, and at the same time ______________. These two factors have caused ______________. Then what shall we do to solve ______________ in the face of such a situation.
　　19、One of our ancient philosophers said, ______________. Chinese people have always been holding this idea to be one of their standards of morality.
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