请帮忙看看这篇自荐信有没有语法或表达方面的错误,Cover letter Dear colleagues:Hello!Thank you very much during the busy schedule to reading my cover letter,I hope you can bring a surprise,My name is ***,studying at the ***,my education is undergraduate and professional electronics and information science and technology,Aged 24-year-old.In June 2007 I graduates form the University,I recommend myself to your company with sincere,hopeing to join the groups of your company,to achieve self-life,apply what they have learned and for the company's development,I will do my best.I study at electronic technology of all professional courses during the four years,familiar with the theory of commonly used analog and digital circuit and its applications,mastering the professional software AutoCAD、MaxPlus-Ⅱ、PROTEL,and the other hand of computer hardware and software for a considerable understanding and I can independent handling of PC hardware and software fault ,The network knowledge I master the theory of seven-network-topology and it's application ,understanding network architecture and principles,in the office software I master office family of software and Photoshop,Corel Draw,etc.As a 2007 electronic engineering graduates,I owned the young and the knowledge.Young may mean that the lack of experience,but also means that young enthusiasm and vigor.I think the greatest strengths of mine is it's very carefully to face my business ,and ability to learn more,during the University of my professional knowledge is not the best ,but I success to achieve its objective of improving my ability to learn!The time for graduation practice in a very clear expression out of the internship period I am very confident,in practice when I reflected its own characteristics!I learn more and more training in the attitude in practice and exercise their ability to work,interpersonal skills and cultivate the spirit of collaboration groups.I have the honour to present a resume of mine,are shown in my experience,skills and qualifications.I can leave for interviews at any time.If appointed,may participate in the working week.Best Regard!
问题很多额.哥哥.我直接帮你改了Cover letter Dear colleagues:Hello!Thank you very much for reading my cover letter during the busy schedule.I hope you can have a surprise.My name is ***,now studying at the ***.I am an undergraduateand（你的意思是你是本科生吧?其实外国人没有本科生这种说法,可能会不懂你的意思）,and I am studying professional electronics and information science&technology,24 years old(24-year-old只能做定语,不能做表语）.In June 2007,I graduated from my university.I recommend myself to your company with sincereness,hoping to join the groups of your company and achieve my life goal.I will make the best of what I have learned and,for the company's development,I will do my best.I studyed electronic technology of all professional courses during the four years,familiar with the theory of commonly used analog and digital circuit and its applications.I have mastered professional softwares such as AutoCAD、MaxPlus-Ⅱ、PROTEL.On the other hand ,I have a considerable understanding of computer hardwares and softwares so that I can independently handle PC hardware and software fault.I master the theory of seven-network-topology and it's application ,understanding network architecture and principles.In the office software,I master office family of software and Photoshop,Corel Draw,etc.As a 2007 electronic engineering graduates,I own the young and the knowledge.Young may mean that the lack of experience,but also means enthusiasm and vigor.I think the greatest strengths of mine is,first,I face my business very carefully,second,my ability to learn more——during the university years,my professional knowledge is not the best ,but I succeeded in achieving the objective of improving my ability to learn!The time for graduation practice in a very clear expression out of the internship period I am very confident,in practice when I reflected its own characteristics!I learn more and more training in the attitude in practice and exercise their ability to work,interpersonal skills and cultivate the spirit of collaboration groups.I have the honour to present a resume of mine,are shown in my experience,skills and qualifications.I can leave for interviews at any time.If appointed,may participate in the working week.Best Regards!我的意见是,如果你是给中国人看,那么够忽悠了,如果是正儿八经的给企业或者外国人看,你还是叫你英语好点的同学重新写一篇吧.后面都改不下去了.完全是Chinglish,而不是English了.
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Where many businesses competing for the customers' dollar,they cannot afford to treat them like inferiors or slaves.
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翻译的时候拘泥;不能&quot, 因为竞争者多. 这个句意明显就是个因为所以的关系, 英语英语有各自的语言习惯, 所以顾客就得是上帝因为有很多商家为了消费者的口袋所竞争.所以我们不把where翻译出来, 把cannot afford to翻译成&quot, 所以这些商家(they)不能像对待下级(这里的下级是贬义词的下级)或者奴隶一样对待消费者(them)
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，那么他们就不能把顾客看成低人一等的人或奴隶....、在.方面..。where在这里强调“在只要有很多企业为赚取顾客的钱而相互竞争
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他们不能像对待下级或奴隶有许多企业争夺顾客的钱，他们不能像对待下级或奴隶。在许多企业争夺顾客的钱
有许多企业争夺顾客的钱，他们不能像对待下级或奴隶.
许多企业争夺客户的美元，他们不能负担像对待下级或奴隶。
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出门在外也不愁大家帮我看一下这段英文语法上有什么问题吗?Mr.Sun,Thank you very much for your reply and appreciation.I received your e-mail many days ago,and then I tried to call your Hong Kong cell phone and left messages twice but I didn’t get the reply until now.I wonder you’ve left Hong Kong again.what I shall do next is keep waiting.if you receive this e-mail,May you please tell me how I could contact you for more disccusion?With best regards,背景是我已经收到他的回邮,他让我打电话给他,但是我打了两次并且留下口讯他都没有回拨我的电话一直到现在,因此我再次发信给他.
1.many days一般不这样说,用a few days2.but I didn’t get the reply until now.but前应加个句号,不能这样连着说.而且后面应用完成时But I haven't got the replay until now.直到现在之前发生的事用完成时更准确.3.I wonder you’ve left Hong Kong again.wonder后面应加if/whether,不加的话意思不准确.4.what I shall do next is keep waiting.应是What shall I do next is keeping waiting.或What shall I do next is to keep waiting.首先前半句的语序不能用陈述句语序,因为它在句首.其次后面is后是表语,应用名词性词组或介词词组.5.May 首字母应小写就这些,总体来说还很标准,都是些小毛病了~
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I wonder IF/WHETHER you’ve left Hong Kong again.What I shall do next is TO keep waiting.If you receive this e-mail,may you please tell me how I CAN contact WITH you for more disccusion?
mr sun, thank you very much for your last reply.I received your e-mail many days ago.and then i was keeping tring to call you via your cellphone in hongkong and left messages twice but i have not...
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1. 不应该直接直呼其姓, 应该在Mr.Sun 之前加"dear" = "Dear Mr.Sun," 2. "and then I tried to call your Hong Kong cell phone and left messages twice but I didn’t get the reply until now."
改成 "then I tried to call ...
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